[Line numbers reference the September 9 draft]
Replace the existing section 1.1.1 with this
1.1.1 PUBLIC COMMUNICATIONS
Expert Groups may choose to keep purely administrative matters private but all substantive business must be performed in a manner that allows the public to observe their work and to respond to it. All proceedings, discussions, and working documents must be published, and a mechanism must be established to allow the public to provide feedback. One common way of meeting these requirements is through the use of one or more mailing lists, but other alternatives such as blogs, Wikis, and discussion forums may be preferred. Whatever communication mechanisms are chosen, these must include an archiving function so that a record of all communications is preserved. Archives must be readable by the public."
Line 190: change "mailing lists" to "communication mechanisms"
Lines 410-411: change "Comments on the JSR should be sent to the JSR's public feedback mailing list" to "Comments on the JSR should be sent to the EC's public feedback mailing list"